The Three Fat Giraffes
Once upon a time in a land of peace there were three fat giraffes. One was a fat mother giraffe, one was a fat baby giraffe and one was a fat dad giraffe. They all lived together.
One morning mother giraffe said to her children, “make your own sweet house to live in because I am leaving.” So they built their houses.
One stormy night an evil space-ship landed and an alien arrived and disaster happened. Wiggle Woggle was the alien’s name. He came to the houses of the three giraffes and saw giraffe number 1. Giraffe number 1 had made a house out of metal. Wiggle Woggle melted the metal and he put the giraffe in the oven!
But Wiggle Woggle said, “not enough fat giraffes to eat for my fat dinner.” So he went to Giraffe number 2’s house. He made his house out of fanta bottles. Wiggle Woggle kicked the fanta bottles and put the poor giraffe in the stew too, but he said, “not enough giraffes.
So he went to Giraffe number 3’s house who believed in aliens. He had made his house of glass and Wiggle Woggle blew the glass but a piece of glass chopped him all apart.
Giraffe number 3 saved his brothers and they lived happily ever after. That was outstanding end.
By Barath
2 comments:
Barath, I really enjoyed reading your fractured fairytale. You enjoyed our Fairytales unit and this shows in the imaginative elements in your story. You are working well towards the learning intention which was to rewrite a known fairy tale using the elements of narrative writing. You used the success criteria to help you create an entertaining fairytale. I particularly like how you changed the original fairytale by adding giraffes and an alien into your story. Wow, you have really used your imagination. You also had a clear beginning, middle and end. Your next step is to make sure you re-read your story during the editing and revising phase to make sure it makes sense and is sequenced correctly. We worked on this during our conference time.
really the fat giraffes
by gabrielle
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